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Re: My Story (Name needed)
« Reply #15 on: January 17, 2010, 00:36:54 »
HarBringer actually, Harbinger sounds wierd and you can rewrite it, Just don't edit the original version please

I would never do that!  I just enjoyed your story enough to want to embellish it a little.  Please keep going with it!

Part 4 is up, Part 5 coming tommorrow

EDIT: Cold Glider you may repost this story if you want your way
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« Reply #16 on: January 17, 2010, 13:56:48 »
Part 5 being constructed, If you have played Halo Wars you might recognize this a bit
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« Reply #17 on: January 17, 2010, 17:03:06 »
wow over 100 views already
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« Reply #18 on: January 17, 2010, 18:58:06 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...
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« Reply #19 on: January 17, 2010, 21:18:51 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...

Extra Spartan ?
They don't stay with Sergeant Forge and that for long and i added some Comdey lol
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« Reply #20 on: January 17, 2010, 21:29:45 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...

Extra Spartan ?
They don't stay with Sergeant Forge and that for long and i added some Comdey lol
I mean, they didn't have any Spartans in their team that time...They met Red Team Gamma at Arcadia, before that, they had no Spartans.
Den glider in, Den glider in, Den glider in i mål igen...

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« Reply #21 on: January 17, 2010, 21:51:25 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...

Extra Spartan ?
They don't stay with Sergeant Forge and that for long and i added some Comdey lol
I mean, they didn't have any Spartans in their team that time...They met Red Team Gamma at Arcadia, before that, they had no Spartans.

This is one time you see Sergeant Forge and them but Spartan M05 And his Team don't go to Arcadia, At that time they will be goi- Oops i am not leaking my story  :laugh:
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« Reply #22 on: January 17, 2010, 21:55:23 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...

Extra Spartan ?
They don't stay with Sergeant Forge and that for long and i added some Comdey lol
I mean, they didn't have any Spartans in their team that time...They met Red Team Gamma at Arcadia, before that, they had no Spartans.

This is one time you see Sergeant Forge and them but Spartan M05 And his Team don't go to Arcadia, At that time they will be goi- Oops i am not leaking my story  :laugh:
So when Anders says "OMG we must go to Arcadia itz the next piee of dah puzzle", Cutter just says "GTFO I'm not taking any orders from a woman! Go back to the kitchen!"?
LOL
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« Reply #23 on: January 17, 2010, 21:56:22 »
LOL...I almost feel like you're a thief when you use the Wars story, but 'the heck, why not?
And the Boss joke was good, too. :laugh:
But as you keep it going, try to change the course of the story a little, now that they have an extra Spartan with them...

Extra Spartan ?
They don't stay with Sergeant Forge and that for long and i added some Comdey lol
I mean, they didn't have any Spartans in their team that time...They met Red Team Gamma at Arcadia, before that, they had no Spartans.

This is one time you see Sergeant Forge and them but Spartan M05 And his Team don't go to Arcadia, At that time they will be goi- Oops i am not leaking my story  :laugh:
So when Anders says "OMG we must go to Arcadia itz the next piee of dah puzzle", Cutter just says "GTFO I'm not taking any orders from a woman! Go back to the kitchen!"?
LOL

I don't understand, Should i make Part 6 so you learn more
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« Reply #24 on: January 18, 2010, 00:13:58 »
Part 6 being constucted
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« Reply #25 on: January 18, 2010, 16:10:14 »
Hornet416!  Dunder Muse is diggin' it.  Your tale is sure packed with action.  You seem to have a lot of main characters and that can get confusing at times.  I might suggest just focusing on a few of them.  It's been a while since I logged into the SGP so you already had 6 parts up by the time I saw it.  You have a great work ethic for writing, it's no wonder you're so prolific!

We are all having fun with this one!
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Re: My Story (Name needed)
« Reply #26 on: January 18, 2010, 17:33:37 »
dunder  muse why ain`t you changing your avatar like the rest of us

my brother keeps giving me more time on the xbox when he writes this story  :)
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« Reply #27 on: January 18, 2010, 18:23:04 »
Lol Dunder Moose remember that this is a Big Story

Part 7 will be constructed soon
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« Reply #28 on: January 18, 2010, 18:59:13 »
Part 7 being constructed
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« Reply #29 on: January 20, 2010, 20:40:53 »
Part 8 will be soon constructed, Sorry for the Delay
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