My Story (Name needed)

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

I haven't thought of a Name yet so any suggestions i like will be ideal

Data:
( ) Is the Species when the name is first said
{ } Is when someone is on Radio, Com or anything similar
[ ] Is a Action that a Character (s) is doing
More soon
Part 1
Techno (AI): Captain, UNSC Carrier spotted drifting in orbit, Classification shows it is the UNSC Fleet Ship the HarBringer... This is wierd.
Captain (Human): What is it Techno?
Techno : The HarBringer went missing soon after leaving Reach, Maybe we should report this to Lord Hood.
Captain: Negative, The HarBringer is drifting away get some teams into it and set it to Lockdown, That is not going anywhere until we find out why it dropped of Radar after Reach was destroyed.
Techno: Roger sending ODST Teams Alpha, Bravo and Charlie.

{Techno over com}: ODST Teams Alpha, Bravo and Charlie to the deck immediately

{Captain over Radio}: ODSTs you are to infiltrate the HarBringer and first find it's Lockdown Controls so more troops can be sent over to speed thing up.
{ODST Steven (Human) of Charlie Team}: Roger that.

[ODSTs In Space]
{ODST Sophie (Human) of Alpha Team}: I wonder why we can't just leave this floating junk.
{ODST Joseph (Human) Leader Of Bravo Team}: I heard this Carrier went off Radars and just vanished after Reach was destroyed.

[ODSTs land at The HarBringer's destroyed Command Bridge]
ODST Andrew (Human) of Charlie Team: Woah, The Troops here never stood a Chance.
ODST Natalie (Human) of Bravo Team: Why is that?
Andrew: The Bridges viewing windows are shattered, And the door there is broken open.
Steven: And?
Andrew: That door leads straight to both the Cafeteria and the Barracks.
Sophie: Glad we weren't here, Wait doesn't every UNSC Ship have Cryo Tubes.
Andrew: Yeah but Why are you asking ?
Sophie: What if someone is in Cryo, Maybe we could get them out.
Steven: But the Captain said to lock down first!
Sophie: What if half of us go to Cryo Rooms and the rest to the Lockdown Controls and we can regroup later.
Joseph: Ok we'll do that, Natalie, John (Human), Jake (Human), Rachel (Human) and Catherine (Human) you'll come with me to the Lockdown Controls so Sophie you lead Steven, Andrew, Callum (Human), Amy (Human) and Chloe (Human) down to all Cryo Rooms you can find and if you do find anything report back to us.
...

Now this is part 1 And the main Character has not yet been introduced and won't until Part 2 but i need your opinions on this first

Part 2
Joseph: Ok the HarBringer is in Lockdown.
John: Shouldn't we radio the others to tell them.
Joseph: Good Idea [Joseph turns on his radio and tries to contact the rest of the team]

Unknown Voice: (Species Unknown) Nobody is safe, The age of Humanity is gone [Radio Chatter cuts out]
Joseph: Team, We need to find the others and fast.
Jake: Why?
Joseph: Some wierd transmission came up, Saying nobody is safe.
Rachel: I'll go, As long as it gets us out of this ship.
Joseph: Ok, Lock and Load this mission just got tougher.

[In Cryo Room 7]

Callum: We checked almost all the rooms and no sign of life, Maybe we should just go find the others.
Andrew: Um i am not so sure about that.
Sophie: What is it Andrew?
Andrew: Look see that.
[The small group look into a Cryo Tube]
Amy: It looks like a Spartan, From Reach!
Sophie: Steven, Try and get to the control deck above and open it.
Steven: Ok.

{Steven on Control deck radio}: Cryo Tube should be opening now
[Cryo Tube opening with a shreaking noise]
Chloe: Is it alive?
Andrew: It? You mean He or She
Chloe: We don't know yet show we could assume it is a it.
Callum: Will you two be quiet.

[Cryo Room door opens]
Sophie: Steven what are you doing?
Steven: It wasn't me, I don't know what that was but i am getting mulltiple life signs outside it!
Andrew: Lock and Load.
[Team arm and aim weapons at door]
Amy: Still nothing, Are you tricking us?
Steven: No but the signs are inside now!

Unknown (Sangheili): Remove this herecy.
[Mulitple Elites remove camoflauge and start firing at the ODSTs]
Joseph: There they are!
[The 11 ODSTs attack the elites]
Elite (Sangheili): We're outnumbered!
[Elite Leader gets away]
Joseph: Looks like we made it in time.
Andrew: Sure does.
Steven: Guys... Help!
[Team look as Steven is held by Elite Leader as he yeilds a Energy Sword, Suddenly the Spartan awakes and launches at the Elite Leader saving Steven, Then grabs the Sword and stabs the Elite]
Steven: [Coughing] That was close.

{Techno on Radio}: ODST Teams are to evacuate now!
{Joseph on Radio back to Techno}: Why?
Andrew: Sir, Look!
[Team stare out window as multiple covenant fleet ships emerge from a Asteroid Belt]
Natalie: We are so screwed!
Joseph: Steven arm some charges at the window, Then take cover.
Steven: Roger that.
[Explosion]
Joseph: Go Go Go!

[Team get to the UNSC Carrier The Normandy as the HarBringer is barraged by the Covenant]

[On the Normandy]
Captain: What did you find, And who is this?
Catherine: We got a Data Disc of what happened to the HarBringer.
Captain: And the Spartan?
Sophie: We found he or she in a Cryo Tube
Captain: Ok, Spartan please tell us some classification
Spartan: Spartan M05 From the 501st Batallion defending Reach.
Captain: Reach is gone, You have been in Cryo since
...

I hope you enjoyed Part 2

Part 3
Captain: Catherine, Play the Data Disc.
Catherine: Ok, But some of it seems erased.

[Data Disc]
Unknown Voice (Human): Captain, Reach is falling, We need to get out of here!
Captain (Human): Negative, We can't let Reach fall to the covenant now.
Unknown Voice: We are losing troops and fast.
Spartan M05 (Human): Sir, We will all die if we stay here and if we don't leave our ships will be left for the covenant to find Data.
Captain: Ok.
[HarBringer takes off]
Unknown Voice (Human): Captain, The other ships aren't leaving, We will lose the Data.
Captain: Fire all weaponary, We can't let them get that Data.
[HarBringer destroys every other ship in the docks]

[In the HarBringer]
Unknown Voice: Sir, All weapons are offline and are out of Ammo.
Captain: Pilot, Keep us moving away from Reach.
Pilot: Affirmative, Sir mulitple Covenant vessels following us, Their firing, Incoming!
[Explosion]
Captain: Commander Matthews to Cryo Room 7, We need you alive.
Spartan M05 A.K.A Commander Matthews: Roger that.
Pilot: Ship controls malfunctioning.
[Explosion from console kills Pilot and Ship drops off grid]
[Data Disc ends with the same transmission Joseph heard, Nobody Is Safe, The Age of Humanity is Gone]

Captain: Play that last section again.
Catherine: Ok.
Unknown Voice (Species Unknown): Nobody is Safe, The age of Humanity is Gone.
Captain: Interesting, Spartan M05 or should i call you Commander Matthews you will be leading ODST Tea Alpha, Bravo and Charlie, Meet in the Mess Hall.
Spartan M05: Roger that

[In the Mess Hall]
Captain: I see you all listened, Ok Commander i will tell you the teams specialities so use them wisely.
Joseph is the Leader Of Bravo Team and a fabled leader so his speciality is LeaderShip.
Callum is the Leader of Alpha Team and is known for his skills with Heavy Weaponary so find something like a Rocket Launcher give him it.
Chloe is the Leader of Charlie Team and is specialised in Breaching manouveres so any locked doors ask her.
Andrew is Demolition Expert so a Tank will make a great Christmas for him.
Catherine is a great Technician as she knows how to play Data Discs and activate Consoles very well.
John is a Assault Expert, His moves devastate the enemy.
Amy is a Sniper Expert and usaully carries a Handgun with her at most times, Give her a position and you will finish missions a whole lot quicker.
Jake is a Special Ops Expert and he carries a small SMG with Silencer at all times.
Natalie is a great distraction Trooper, She uses incredible speed to avoid enemy gunfire and can usaully get things done quickly.
Steven is a Stealth and Electronics Expert, His record shows more Kills using a Knife than any gun he uses and he is good at using Electronics to Counter any Enemy.
Rachel is a Vehicle Expert, She can be useful more in a Vehicle than on the Grounds sometimes.
And last but not least Sophie is a Co Leader and is useful for taking out hostile transport.
...

Part 3 is here so i hope you like it

Part 4
Spartan M05: When do we attack?
Captain: Hold on Commander, Harvest is still very unexplored so we are dropping you to Alpha Base where you will find Sergeant Forge from the Spirit Of Fire.
Spartan M05: Roger that
Captain: Your team is ready and prepped for drop but you're a Spartan so you'll be sent first to clear any hostiles for when the team drop.
Spartan: Affirmative

{Joseph on Radio}: Ok Commander give us the order when you are ready.
{Spartan M05 on Radio}: I will.

[On Harvest, Alpha Base]
Sergeant Forge: So you're a Spartan, We are to infiltrate some Holy Relic of the covenant, Why aren't you listening?
Spartan M05: Keep an Eye on the sky, {Radio to team} Team drop now!
{Joseph on Radio}: Roger, Troopers We are dropping into Hell !
{Radio from a Pelican}: We are dropping some Warthogs to ally your team [Explosion] We are hit i repeat we are hit, Engines offline! [Pelican explodes]

[Alpha Base]
Sergeant Forge: Great Fireworks but we need to continue the mission.
Spartan M05: We are, Amy you and John will take a Sniper tower and cover us, Callum, Andrew, Steven, Rachel, Natalie and Catherine you come with me and Jake, Chloe, Joseph and Sophie you cover us from the crashed Pelican.

{Amy and John in Sniper Tower}: We are in position and ready to assist.
{Jake, Chloe, Joseph and Sophie at Crashed Pelican}: Same here.
Spartan M05: Ok team launch the attack!
{Gunfire flies through the Air, Not much else is heard}
Elite (Sangheili): The Humans are attacking the Relic, Inform the Arbiter.
Grunt (Unggoy): Ok [Sprints to inside of Holy Relic], Arbiter Arbiter!
Arbiter (Sangheili): [Grabs Grunt's neck] What makes you interrupt the Holy Prophet!
Prophet Of Regret: Put him down Arbiter.
Arbiter: As you wish.
Grunt: Earth people attacking, Trying to get into the Relic!
Arbiter: What?!?, Arm the charges!

[Outside]
Joseph: Commander their retreating into the Relic.
Spartan M05: Team move up.
Steven: Commander, There is some big thing wired into the Relic.
Spartan M05: [Kills Elite] I see it, Lets get closer.
[Closer]
Andrew: It is a Bomb Detonator, This must be destroyed unless we won't get in.
{Pelican Radio}: Dropping off a Scorpion Unit to ally you.
Andrew: Scorpion... Dibs!
{Andrew in Scorpion Tank}: May i?
Spartan M05: Yes you may.
{Andrew in Scorpion Tank}:Kaboom!
[Detonator is destroyed]
Spartan M05: Great work team, Sergeant Forge, Lead Professor Anders and your team in and we'll gaurd the outside.
Sergeant Forge: We can count on you.
...

Part 4 reveals it, Yes these parts are Halo Wars and if i continue long enough i'll be at Halo: CE Timeline, Hope you enjoyed

Part 5
Sergeant Forge: What are you doing?!?
Professor Anders (Human): Nothing ventured, Nothing gained.
[Anders puts her hand over the Unknown control panel, It moves to a certain way when her hands is near and a Map of Stars and all appears]
Professor Anders: Woah, That isn't what i expected!
Elite (Sangheili): Herecy, Remove this filth!
[Marine is shot in back by Needler and dies, Sergeant Forge, Anders and the other Marines take over]
Sergeant Forge: Spirit Of Fire this is Forge we need backup!
Serena (AI): Roger that, Informing Spartan M05 and his team and we are dropping Two Grizzly Units.
Sergeant Forge: Ok, Make it quick.

[Outside the Relic]
Spartan M05: Ok team, Sergeant Forge and his team have been pinned down inside the Relic, We are going in, Andrew and Rachel you two stay here and wait for the Grizzly Units then regroup with us inside.
Andrew and Rachel: Affirmative.
Joseph: Team, Lock and Load!

[Inside the Relic]
Steven: Hunters!
Spartan M05: Natalie, Distract them by getting behind them then Amy snipe them in the back.
[Natalie zooms behind the Hunters and Amy snipes one but misses the other]
Steven: I'll get it.
[Steven runs at Hunter and stabs his Knife into it's back]
Hunter (Lekgolo): {Groans then falls down lifeless]
Spartan M05: Good Work.
{Joseph on Radio}: Andrew, Any sign of those Tanks?
{Andrew on Radio}: Yep, Just touching down and we're in.
{Joseph on Radio}: Roger that, We've just cleared the first Hallway, Had a Hunter problem.
Spartan M05: Team, Move up!
[Team spot Grunts with detpacks about to destroy a Bridge Console, Then they blow up]
Sophie: What was that!?!
{Andrew in Grizzly Tank}: Woohoo, That is what i call a Explosion!
Spartan M05: Good work Andrew, Lets get across that Bridge before more show up.
{Andrew in Grizzly Tank}: Ok.
Grunt (Unggoy): Boss, Earth people crossing Bridge with two tanks!
Elite (Sangheili): Get Hunters to fire at the Humans, Focus on  the pinned humans first!
Grunt: Ok boss.
Elite: Stop calling me boss.
Grunt: Ok boss.
Elite: {Slaps self}.

[Explosions as Andrew and Rachel demolish covenant stronghold]
Spartan M05: Sergeant Forge, I see you are still in One piece.
Sergeant Forge: All thanks to you.
Captain Cutter (Human): Forge, We have signs of Covenant moving to your location get out of there ASAP!
Sergeant Forge: Already on our way.
...

Part 5 seems short but i am sure you'll enjoy

Part 6
Spartan M05: Sergeant, You and your team stay behind us.
Sergeant Forge: Ok.
Spartan M05: Andrew and Rachel you go first and clear the way.
{Andrew and Rachel in Grizzly Tanks}: Already going.
[Explosions]
Joseph: Right the first hallway clear move up to the Bridge.
Amy: I would consider the other one.
John: Why is that?
Amy: Look there.
[Grunts with Explosive Charges destroy the Bridge, Hordes of Covenant shut the console for the other Bridge]
Professor Anders: I can hack that Console to get the Bridge back up and running.
Spartan M05: Do it, We'll protect you, Ok Steven, Sophie, Callum and Catherine you get in that Sniper Tower and Andrew, You and Rachel will protect Anders while the rest of us attempt to block this Chambers the Covenant are coming from.
Joseph: You heard the Commander now lets go!
[Multiple Gunfire fills the Relic, Bridge is restored]
Professor Anders: Got it.
Steven: WRAITH!
Spartan M05: I got it. [Spartan M05 Jacks and takes over the Wraith]
Andrew: Son Of A Gun!

[Entrance of Relic]
Marine Team Leader (Human):Sergeant, Get Anders out of here we will cover you.
Spartan M05: Marines you go with the Sergeant and return to your ship we'll handle this.
Pelican Pilot (Human): This is Echo Green waiting for pick up.
[Sergeant Forge, Professor Anders and Marines get in Pelican]
...

Part 6 will be the last time you'll see the Halo Wars main story sections for a while so i hope you enjoy    

Part 7
Joseph: Just keep your ground, We ccan win this!
[Last Hunter is killed]
Steven: That was close.
Sophie: You can say that again, So what now?
Spartan M05: That map Professor Anders described, They said when she went near it the Console moved and then the Covenant attacked.
Steven: So?
Spartan M05:Two planets that were recognizable showed up, Arcadia and Earth.
Joseph: Wait a minute, Are you saying the Covenant might attack Earth and Arcadia?
Spartan M05: Could be, Ok new plan but first we will inform the Captain on this miss-[Spartan M05 is interrupted]
Unknown Voice (Human): He already knows.
Joseph: Who are you?
Unknown Voice: My name is Floria, And i am the Commanding Officer of the UNSC HeartBreaker which was recently disabled and destroyed.
Catherine: So your ship was destroyed and you're the only Survivor?
Floria: Possibly, I am not sure yet.
John: How does the Captain already know our plan?
Floria: Every ODST Armour has a small microphone that a UNSC Ship can use the Microphone's Unique Key Code to listen in, We have been listening in from Joseph's Microphone.
Pelican Pilot: This is Yellow Angel en route to your location.

[On the Normandy]
Captain: So your plan is to send half of the Group with Joseph to Earth while you and the rest go to Arcadia.
Spartan M05: That is correct.
Captain: I will clear this with Lord Hood, Until we have the right to do so you will do your daily jobs.
Spartan M05: Roger that.

[Mess Hall]
Steven: So Commander, Who goes with who if we are allowed?
Joseph: I was thinking the way we did in the HarBringer, But i'll let the Commander choose.
Spartan M05: Actually Joseph we'll go that way, I was not with you then so i won't know.
Steven: I'll go that way, Just as long as no Elite strangles me again.
Spartan M05: Joseph, You and your team will go to Earth while the rest come with me to Arcadia.
Sophie: Ok.
{Techno over Com}: Spartan M05 and your team, Lord Hood would like to speak with you.
Marine (Human): [Whispering in Background] Lord Hood, These people must be good.
...

Part 7 short again but you might enjoy the change of story
 
NOTE: As Dunder Moose is a great Story Writer i sent him a small section of Part 8, Before i post Part 8 i will need him to quote my message and send me it back so i can remember and sorry for the delay in adding Parts i have had School and all that  :laugh:

[Imppa]

I like it, keep going! And the grammar is pretty nice, too! Just some more dots, and it'll be even better.
No name ideas though.

[odst glitcher]

NICE

i wanna be a elite wort wort wort stab you with my sword i will XD

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

I like it, keep going! And the grammar is pretty nice, too! Just some more dots, and it'll be even better.
No name ideas though.

Dots?

[Imppa]

I like it, keep going! And the grammar is pretty nice, too! Just some more dots, and it'll be even better.
No name ideas though.

Dots?

The mark in the end of a phrase is a dot
.<-that there.
Your sentences lack them. Dots make the text more readable.
And some commas, too.
,

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

I like it, keep going! And the grammar is pretty nice, too! Just some more dots, and it'll be even better.
No name ideas though.

Dots?

The mark in the end of a phrase is a dot
.<-that there.
Your sentences lack them. Dots make the text more readable.
And some commas, too.
,

Ok and i am waiting for atleast one more person to comment, I might get Part 2 done tonight but that will not be known for now

[EnigmaBiz]

Reads like a Play....I like it.


Suggestion Title:REQUIEM HORIZON

Requiem: noun
1.    Roman Catholic Church.
a.    Also called Requiem Mass. the Mass celebrated for the repose of the souls of the dead.
b.    a celebration of this Mass.
c.    a plainsong setting for this Mass.
2.    any musical service, hymn, or dirge for the repose of the dead.

[Imppa]

Reads like a Play....I like it.


Suggestion Title:REQUIEM HORIZON

Requiem: noun
1.    Roman Catholic Church.
a.    Also called Requiem Mass. the Mass celebrated for the repose of the souls of the dead.
b.    a celebration of this Mass.
c.    a plainsong setting for this Mass.
2.    any musical service, hymn, or dirge for the repose of the dead.

You just love hard words, don't you?

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

Part 2 being constructed, You'll meet the Main Character soon and do you guys think i should add a timeline sort of thing?

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

Part 3 Being Constructed, Mainly this part you will here the Data Disc from the HarBringer and mainly the main characters in the Series,  They are also described more than they were before

[Imppa]

Well, I think I didn't need to know the specialities of all the characters, but I guess it means we're gonna have some fighting, right?

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

Well, I think I didn't need to know the specialities of all the characters, but I guess it means we're gonna have some fighting, right?

Yep soon maybe in Part 4 and Do you think i should make more stories as i have been linking this one to my Groups on Bungie.Net that is why i continued the Story because people liked it, Hopefully Dunder Moose will look at this, His Perchance To Dream got me to make this

[ColdGlider]

Hopefully Dunder Moose will look at this, His Perchance To Dream got me to make this

The Moose is a muse!  Who knew?   All hail Dunder Muse!

Hornet, you obviously have some great story ideas in your head!  My suggestion would be to refrain from all of the parenthetical character descriptions in lieu of some brief establishing text prior to the conversations... even if you want to maintain the script format.  For example, this text:

[ODSTs In Space]
{ODST Sophie (Human) of Alpha Team}: I wonder why we can't just leave this floating junk.
{ODST Joseph (Human) Leader Of Bravo Team}: I heard this Carrier went off Radars and just vanished after Reach was destroyed.

Might become:

Minutes later, three ODST teams make their way toward the drifting HarBringer.  Sophie, co-leader of Alpha Team and hostile transport specialist, converses with Bravo Team's leader, Joseph.

Sophie: I wonder why we can't just leave this floating pile of junk.
Joseph: I heard this carrier dropped off radar and just... vanished... after Reach was destroyed.

Of course you could also migrate this from the play/script format to the straight narrative format of a novel.  I took the liberty to try my hand at rewriting Part 1 in this manner.  I changed "HarBringer" to "Harbinger" since I assumed that's what you meant.  Let me know what you think.  I had fun getting into the heads of a few of your characters.

The bridge of the vessel Requiem glowed in the surreal light that characterized all ships of its kind.  Countless pinpoints of light from the silent void of space refracted through its observation panels and mingled with the dull illumination of navigation displays and status readouts.   Like the majestic harmony of a choir heard at a great distance, only echoes of its majesty could be discerned among the droning chatter of everyday life.  Somewhere planetside, cathedral walls reverberated with the pulse of life singing pleas to the heavens.  On the Requiem, other signals were being received.

The ship's captain stared out into the ocean of space as a small holographic figure flickered busily on his control panel.  While the captain scrutinized his surroundings with human eyes at the slow steady pulse of his heart, the AI construct "Techno" was monitoring the situation at trillions of cycles per second.

"Captain, UNSC Carrier spotted drifting in orbit.  Classification shows it is the UNSC Fleet Ship, Harbinger.  This was... unexpected."

"Why is that, Techno?"

"The Harbinger went missing soon after leaving Reach.  Perhaps we should report this to Lord Hood."

The Captain looked down at his monitoring console, then back out into space.

"Negative, the Harbinger is drifting away.  Get some teams on board and set it to Lockdown Status.  That ship's not going anywhere until we find out why it dropped off radar after Reach was destroyed.  Hood can wait until we have some answers for him."

"Roger.  Deploying ODST teams Alpha, Bravo and Charlie."

Communication radios began buzzing with activity as the conversation continued over secure channels.  Techno's voice was artificial but was virtually indistinguishable from that of any other human.  "ODST teams Alpha, Bravo and Charlie to the deck immediately!"

The Captain keyed his comm terminal.  "ODSTs, you are to infiltrate the Harbinger and engage its lockdown controls so that a standard marine recovery team can be deployed.  This is your primary objective."

Steven, a member of ODST Team Charlie, heard the order over his Comm Unit.  He leaped up from the wires and circuit boards of his repair bench and adjusted his personal transmitter.  "Roger that!" he responded.

Minutes later, three ODST teams were making their way toward the drifting carrier.  Sophie, co-leader of Alpha Team and transport specialist, was less than excited about the mission.  She turned toward Bravo Team's leader, Joseph.  "I wonder why we can't just leave this floating pile of junk?"

Steven overheard the question.  He, too, wondered why so many of them were needed for such a cut-and-dry operation.  He looked up from his data pad to see if Sophie would even get a response.

Joseph kept quiet before speaking.  He had reviewed a file collated by Techno while departing the Requiem.  The Harbinger survived the destruction of Reach, but disappeared from radar shortly afterward.  UNSC carriers weren't supposed to just "disappear".  Normally, Sophie's comment would have been answered by a stern gaze and nothing more.  But he had a file on her, too. 

"It went missing.  Now we've found it.  Do your job." came his response.  Steven turned his attention back to his data pad.

"A hell of a lot went missing after Reach was destroyed," Sophie thought.  People, places, feelings.  So much gone in an instant, leaving humanity with nothing more than desperate hope and even more war.   She- like every other human being she met- clung to the former like it was a personal mantra.  The latter was just her job.

The ODST's small deployment craft touched down on a makeshift landing pad that used to house many of the Harbinger's communication structures.  It was one of the few features of the ship that Sophie recognized.  The Harbinger was a class of UNSC ship that she hadn't read about before, let alone visited.  Its exterior was so damaged that it was hard to make out where even the bridge must have been originally.  It didn't matter to Sophie.  The sooner they found the lockdown controls, the sooner they'd be making their way back to the Requiem.

It didn't take long to get inside the Harbinger's drifting shell.  Chloe, Charlie Team's expert at breaching spacecraft, led the way along darkened passageways after navigating the team down from the carrier's exterior.  As they made their way toward the control bridge, desperation seemed to fill the emptiness like lungs full of cold air.  It felt like Reach. 

Andrew's voice pierced the silence as he spoke through his comm: "Woah!  The troops here never stood a chance!"  It was a cloyingly obvious statement, typical of Charlie Team.  Of course Charlie was inundated with the obvious.  They'd been sent on countless missions like this one into downed UNSC ships to provide post-mortems and secure assets from vessels gone dark.  What else would one expect to find except the brutal footprints of battle?

Natalie was always quick with the first response.  She was just as quick in battle.  "Why is that?" she asked.

"The bridge's observation windows are shattered and the door over there is broken open." Andrew replied. 

Steven was used to Andrew's you-connect-the-dots battle assessments.  He didn't feel like playing the game today.  The quiet solitude of his repair bench was waiting back on the Requiem.  Circuits didn't keep you waiting for dramatic effect- they just did their duty. 

"And?" Steven barked with obvious irritation "This means that the glorious battle of the Harbinger concluded how?  Skip to the end, Andrew."
 
"Well, that broken down door over there leads straight to both the cafeteria and the barracks.  So whoever or whatever breached the windows landed at the Bloodshed Buffet.  It was a one-stop shop for the bad guys; bridge, barracks, sandwiches!  What else..."

"Alright, enough!  I get it!" Steven yelled.  For some reason the usual marine cynicism didn't sit well with him today.  The Harbinger wasn't just quiet, it was disquieting.  Something below the surface didn't feel right.

Sophie looked around at the remains of the bridge.  The only light coming in was from the stars and the searchlights they had mounted in their armor.  Shadows reached out where hope had fallen.  "Glad we weren't here," she mumbled.  "Who was here?" she thought to herself.  The preliminary scans of the ship made by Techno indicated zero lifeforms.  Well, none still living anyhow. 

"Wait- doesn't every UNSC Ship have cryo tubes?" Sophie asked.

Andrew looked up from inspecting the busted door: "Yeah, but why are you asking?"

"If someone is still in cryo, they might not have showed up on the scanners.  Shouldn't we be checking the barracks for survivors?"

Steven was impatient to complete the mission.  "The Captain gave us an objective.  Let's get it done."

"I agree, but we won't need three teams to flip a couple of switches.  The rest of us might as well do something useful while we're here."

Joseph had remained silent.  He wasn't only Bravo Team's leader, he was the leader's leader.  He acted, and his troops followed.  Speech was usually superfluous.  Today he had three different teams on a one-team mission.  He didn't know why, and he wanted answers.  More than that, we wanted to shut up the rookies.  Standing in the center of the bridge, he called out his orders: "Chloe, lead the way for Sophie, Steven, Andrew, Callum, and Amy.  You're going to the Cryo Room and you're checking for survivors.  The rest of you are following me to the Lockdown controls.  We'll regroup here in fifteen.  Move out!"

Steven gave a sidelong glance at Sophie as they formed up behind Chloe.  "I thought you wanted to just leave this floating pile of junk," he quipped.

The Harbinger answered with silence.

[Hornet 416 (Vandal)]

HarBringer actually, Harbinger sounds wierd and you can rewrite it, Just don't edit the original version please

[ColdGlider]

HarBringer actually, Harbinger sounds wierd and you can rewrite it, Just don't edit the original version please

I would never do that!  I just enjoyed your story enough to want to embellish it a little.  Please keep going with it!